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This is a narrative essay that i got an 18/30 on. Here are the comments my teacher left me: Pay attention to grammar. You have minor mistakes sprinkled throughout this essay, on most lines. The introduction is interesting but needs a focus. I understand that you wanted to leave high school and get your GED but you don’t provide convincing reasons for doing so. The reasons don’t sound particularly valid, and there doesn’t seem to be a plan on what to do once you’ve left high school. Overall, the grammar is really substandard and not acceptable. If you want to pass this class, you will need to ensure that all of your essays are in standard English. Please revise. I need the grammar and fluidity to be better. I want my arguments to be stronger. You don’t need to rewrite it just add onto what i have and change what i already have written. My teacher is an extremely hard grader so please give it all you got, thanks!.Here is the outline for the essay in case you need it: What are you going to write about? Well, you have a choice about which story — a real story from your life — you would like to share. You can either write about:

  • One particular story from your life that portrays a significant moment when you realized something, discovered something, or changed as a person. Ideally, this would represent a moment, less than twenty-four hours.
  • A progressive biography, again the real story from your life. Tell about your life from earliest memory and how you arrived at the present time and place. You will certainly highlight some portions of your life more than others, but your goal is to show what led up to your being here, today, in your particular situation.

The narrative essay must demonstrate your ability to tell a story that has these features:

  1. Has a sense of time and place (setting)
  2. Has relatable, identifiable characters
  3. Focuses on actions (events) and shows
    1. a crisis or crises, a climax (turning point), and a resolution
  4. Is highly descriptive in nature
  5. Includes dialogue
  6. Is clearly organized and easy to follow
  7. May be narrated in either first or third person perspective
  8. Has importance and significance, and connects to the reader

For this particular assignment, you do not need a Works Cited page since you are telling your own story. Some particulars for this assignment:

  1. It should be formatted in MLA style
  2. Length: 5-7+ pages
  3. Outline submitted, as a separate assignment
  4. Submitted via Canvas

Good luck. I’m sure you’ll do a great job!

Rubric

MC Narrative Essay Rubric

MC Narrative Essay Rubric

CriteriaRatingsPts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeThesis

clear, specific, original, significant, insightful.

5.0 pts

clear and purposeful.

4.0 pts

controlling idea may be overly general or not closely linked to content of essay.

3.0 pts

unclear or vague, poorly linked to content of essay.

2.0 pts

lacks a thesis or controlling idea; does not address assigned topic.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeOrganization

logical, creative organization growing naturally from thesis and content; paragraphs linked to thesis and to each other using fluid transitions; strong introduction and conclusion.

5.0 pts

logical organization; well-developed introduction and conclusion; paragraphs linked to thesis and to each other using effective transitions.

4.0 pts

some evidence of organization or rhetorical framework; clear beginning, middle, and end.

3.0 pts

poorly structured or disordered.

2.0 pts

lacks organizing principle; lacks clear beginning, middle, and end;. lacks clear paragraphing.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeDevelopment

paragraphs thoroughly developed and linked by unobtrusive, organic transitions; graceful use of varied rhetorical strategies as necessary (narration, cause & effect, process, etc.); rich variety of convincing reasons, explanations, examples, illustrations; concrete, powerful details.

5.0 pts

rhetorical strategies used as necessary (narration, cause & effect, process, etc.); coherent paragraphs, fully developed with supporting reasons, explanations, examples, illustrations; generalizations supported with relevant, specific details.

4.0 pts

uses paragraphs and topic sentences; gives supporting reasons and examples, but may not be logically reasoned or fully developed.

3.0 pts

underdeveloped; paragraphs overly long or short, arbitrarily or illogically ordered, incoherent or not unified; lack of support for ideas; lack of concrete detail; irrelevancies, redundancies, oversimplifications, filler. May not meet length requirement.

2.0 pts

severely underdeveloped; seriously and consistently illogical and/or predicated on false premises; absence of concrete detail.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeLanguage

grace and economy of expression; conscious choice of language; vivid, precise, original word choice. TONE/VOICE: authoritative, genuine authorial voice; awareness of audience.

5.0 pts

concise sentences; accurate and effective word choice. TONE/VOICE: Engaging authorial voice; some awareness of audience.

4.0 pts

clear writing, mostly accurate word choice. TONE/VOICE: inconsistent authorial voice, basic awareness of audience.

3.0 pts

unclear or incoherent writing. TONE/VOICE: little awareness of audience.

2.0 pts

obscure, vague writing; inaccurate word choice. TONE/VOICE: little or no awareness of audience.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeSentences

rich variety and complexity of sentence structure; free of basic errors such as fragments, run-ons, subject/verb agreement.

5.0 pts

some variety and complexity of sentence structure; mostly free of basic errors such as fragments, run-ons, subject/verb agreement.

4.0 pts

complete, mostly correct sentences; may contain occasional grammatical or syntactical errors.

3.0 pts

wordy, confusing, or incomplete sentences; frequent grammatical or syntactical errors.

2.0 pts

numerous grammatical or syntactical errors.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeGrammatical conventions

mastery of conventions of edited standard English.

5.0 pts

observes conventions of standard written English.

4.0 pts

free of distracting errors of spelling and punctuation.

3.0 pts

distracting mechanical errors.

2.0 pts

numerous distracting mechanical errors.

1.0 pts

5.0 pts

Total Points: 30.0

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